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  • Dramatic Poetry Re: salvator mundi

    What does it mean, anyway?

    Nov 11, 2005
  • Other Re: Writing Challenge 11/7

    Sorry, I forgot I wasn't logged on.

    Nov 11, 2005
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: My Road

    Here I am, alone I walk Down roads of rocks and ice. There’s no one here with which to talk They left after giving advice. The third line needs a ...

    Nov 11, 2005
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: salvator mundi

    I understood it a bit, but I don't see how the title fits with it, and the whole thing is a little too descriptive.

    Nov 11, 2005
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: You Were Not Meant To Die

    This is very sad. Very powerful, though. Wonderful work. -*Twinkles

    Nov 11, 2005
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: Nightfall

    Very nice. In the first four stanzas, you use 'the' too many times. Well done. -*Twinkles

    Nov 11, 2005
  • Art & Photography Re: Neffy's art: Updated 15/11/2005

    That's great coulorizing! Great work!

    Nov 10, 2005
  • Randomosity Re: Test

    Quite right, quite right. An amazing, amazing piece. I..I..don't know how to say it. I weep for ones who have not read is most beautiful!

    Nov 10, 2005
  • Romantic Short Stories Re: Wrong Time, Wrong Place, Wrong Person...

    Good work. The last line is nice, like Madhatter said. This was very interesting.

    Nov 7, 2005
  • Lyric Poetry Re: Untitled II 11-06-05

    I do not like the last line. I am not sure what this poem means, but the last line kinda ruined it. The rest of the poem is quite well ...

    Nov 7, 2005
  • Lyric Poetry Re: Searching

    I like the way you ended each stanza with stating that something is over. It really gave flavor to the poem. I know lyric poetry is not supposed to have ...

    Nov 7, 2005
  • Lyric Poetry Re: Dreams

    I like this it is very simple and just touching on things. Your writing style is very good, and the imagery/metaphors you use are wonderful. You are a talented writer. ...

    Nov 7, 2005
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: Untitled 11-6-05

    I don't like the last stanza much, the image there disgusts me, but I think it's a good ending, good work. I would have to say that the first stanza ...

    Nov 7, 2005
  • General Fiction Novels Re: ...1st chap of this fan fic tht Ive written. Plz r & r.

    Em, it's a good start, but we need a bit more. Also, houselves cannot quit, they must be given clothing from their owners.

    Nov 6, 2005
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: Where no one will know

    Very whimsical and happy. I really love it. Wonderful work. The imagery is fabulous and I really like the last stanza, it really wrapped it up. -*Twinkles

    Nov 4, 2005


It had a perfectly round door like a porthole, painted green, with a shiny yellow brass knob in the exact middle. The door opened on to a tube-shaped hall like a tunnel: a very comfortable tunnel without smoke, with panelled walls, and floors tiled and carpeted, provided with polished chairs, and lots and lots of pegs for hats and coats—the hobbit was fond of visitors. The tunnel wound on and on, going fairly but not quite straight into the side of the hill —The Hill, as all the people for many miles round called it—and many little round doors opened out of it, first on one side and then on another.
— JRR Tolkien